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PostSubject: A winter breeze   3/5/2012, 10:12 am

NOTE TO READER THIS IS ONLY THE INTRO IF ENOUGH INTREST IS SHOWN ILL DO A BIT MORE BUT THATS HIGHLY DOUBTFULL


Winter chill had been lying in a field by the ever free forest for what seemed to be hours, the grass was gently reflecting the moon light off the field and in the distance the glowing canter lot waterfalls covering most of the moon. The nights wind slowly whisked over winters back making her gown flutter slightly. For any pony from ponyville would tell you, this was a classic night for staying up and admiring the beautiful night and its many activities. Winter was no different; she too wished that the night held a pass time for her to do. Lying out in the night time would make any pony happy and a prime opportunity to spend valuable time with friends , Winter however had no more friends and nothing more to do, the day had already drained her of all her energy and she was in no mood to interact with anything or any pony.

The everfree forest was stirring more of a noise than normal , deep from the branches came the growls of a manticore and the lost spirits of the three races of eqestria gently rolled off the tongues of the leaves . The cold wind was now not so settling but making the small mare shiver, she pulled her cloak gently over her small hooves and began to feel a small cold burning on her leg. Jumping up and letting out a small shriek she hopped a foot back and stood idly. Another gust of wind brushed over winter’s face, it also rolled over to the underside of the cloak which had now become damp in the fields dew. Desperately now winter focused on her cloak in the hope that it was just a gust of wind and nothing else, she flicked the corner of the gown over and saw a small shimmer of light come from the corner. It seemed to look like a chain , probably used for small decoration on such gowns but as the wind now started to become restless it was apparent to Winter Chill that something was more than likely weighing down her gown as it had not flew off in the wind .

It was an amulet, connected by a small gold chain. Winter Chill focused hard on the amulet with her eyes, trotting around it to find the best light for view. A small flicker or light sparked from winter’s horn. She let out a deep breath and began to move closer towards the amulet. The chain was gently coiled around its self and the bold square object which had pricked the young mare’s side was a pure black frame, sharp at each edge. It also held a smaller square emerald.”No not this , why me” Stuttered Winter Chill .She shut her eyes and began to grit her teeth aggressively smashing her hoofs on the floor .Until the dark void of her shut eyes turned a subtle grey .

The moon was starting to descend; Luna had started her spell to retract her night. Dawn had started to break early . But the burning sun was now erupting over the horizon and rushing over the everfree forest. “What am I going to do now ...” Said the idle mare with a tear running over her nose. “I can’t believe you’re really dead ...”

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PostSubject: Re: A winter breeze   3/5/2012, 10:26 am

needs more luna
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PostSubject: Re: A winter breeze   3/5/2012, 6:12 pm

Luna wrote:
needs more luna
Not sure if way to improve , or just wants Luna fan fic

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PostSubject: Re: A winter breeze   3/5/2012, 10:39 pm

needs more cannon characters, else im out :D

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